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The Unholy District by BradRockZ

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From: Penelope_Ink

Date: 2015-11-17

Chapter: 7

This chapter was so good! I really liked it :) Lots of action going on and I adored the fact that Chester's first thought was to throw Mike some food through the window.


It sucks that they can't get Mike out and now Brad is separated from them too. Divide and conquer, I hate to think that's what the ghosts/bad guy is working at.


The part with the teddy bear and ax head - way trippy, but very cool! I like it. Now I can only wonder why Brad and Mike's names are there...they're just kids. Can't wait to find out more about that.


Update again soon, it's getting really good!

From: Razorzout

Date: 2015-11-12

Chapter: 7

This story just became very, very interesting and I love it. Bravo, I cannot wait for the next chapter!

From: nab

Date: 2015-11-11

Chapter: 6

Cliffhanger?!! How dare you *sulks* haha. Poor Brad. All he wanted to do was help his friend. Can't wait for the update

From: Penelope_Ink

Date: 2015-10-30

Chapter: 6

Aw, pieces are coming together. So did Brad go through the door he wasn't supposed to? hmmmm...got me curious now. Can't wait to see what the others have to say about it all. And I want to see the killer!

From: Screamingsilently

Date: 2015-10-24

Chapter: 6

Did this story become a horror movie? It first looked like a fun teenager movie but turned out to be totally different. This is how good you are!

From: Razorzout

Date: 2015-10-22

Chapter: 5

A ten year old psychopathic murder with an ax and a teddy bear that could possibly living at the school still after all this time? If they find Eden, will Eden still act like a child even though they'd be twenty by the time the guys find him? Will Eden be dead and attempting to get revenge on their killer from the afterlife? Or were they just a weird kid? There are so many possibilities....... This is awesome.

From: nab

Date: 2015-10-16

Chapter: 5

Who is eden? The picture creeps me out. I kept thinking that someone is going to come up to Brad and hurt him while he was looking at the picture

From: Razorzout

Date: 2015-09-24

Chapter: 5

Ok, firstly I'd like to apologize for not reading this or reviewing but I FINALLY sat my ass down and did it (also I'm nervous and shy so I'm scared of reviewing stories. sorry!). Now to the review part. The plot of this is very interesting and though having Rob stop and explain a few things did clear up some confusion, it lessened the suspense. That being said, I understand why you did it and it does make more sense. The characters are very fun to read about and it is entertaining to simply experience how they act in the light you've portrayed them in. Them having to constantly be separated gives me a good picture of what their reputation at the school is and I love how they are still sometimes rebellious and chose the break that rule.


Overall from what I have read, I don't find it very confusing at all and I'm interested to see how it turns out. Thank you for writing this, its fun to read.

From: Penelope_Ink

Date: 2015-09-22

Chapter: 5

Well darn, I was hoping they'd spring Mike in this chapter. At least he's not freaking out too much anymore. The picture with the bloody teddybear is disturbing. I'm interested to hear more about that :) I love a good scary story.

From: nab

Date: 2015-09-11

Chapter: 4

There's a ghost in the school? An escaped convict? Someone is being held prisoner there? Haha.

From: Penelope_Ink

Date: 2015-09-09

Chapter: 4

Oh no, poor Mike! He's locked in the basement. I'd be freaking out too. In the dark, all those noises. I hope the others can find a way to get him out.


Haha I totally laughed over Chester and his shirts XD so typical. Yes, we're having this wild food fight, but please, mind my favorite shirt!


So they're not alone in the school, since someone was playing music...was it the escaped killer? Hopefully not, since Mike is now trapped with whoever it was.


Or maybe it's a ghost that just appreciates rock music.


Either is possible!

From: nab

Date: 2015-08-09

Chapter: 3

This chapter was a bit confusing. Or maybe because I had limited imagination, and need the author to spoon feed me the information. Hahaha. Looking forward to the next one

From: Penelope_Ink

Date: 2015-08-02

Chapter: 3

I get it, so they're like in a reform school of types, only much larger. Reform school is perfect breeding ground for rebellion, which they obviously have. And there's a criminal hiding in there too. That throws a different sort of twist on things, maybe he'll bring something worldly dangerous into the story (like a gun or a knife, a weapon) and then they'll have the supernatural danger as well.


Update soon :) I want to see where you'll take this. I hope none of them die via bad guy or ghost.


I like the idea that they catch the bad guy though. Rebellious kids turn heroes.


And before I go, favorite line in this chapter: I wouldn't say that agreeing with Mike was a bad choice.


I laughed out loud at that XD The way Rob said it in my head was hilarious.

From: Penelope_Ink

Date: 2015-07-25

Chapter: 2

Hey-lo :) I have to say, the mental image from chapter one with Rob being surrounded by cheerleaders was hysterical. I could just see him, trying to be serious with his backpack at his feet and maybe a book cradled on his lap and wham! He gets bumped by some girl practicing a cheer lol.


Joe was obviously being evil. Typical Joe.


What's the deal with them not being allowed to have music? How sad of an existence would that be to not be able to listen to music :( You'll have to go into that a little further.


If the school is so strict, not allowing music and doing searches so often, then having the students rebel is a natural consequence.


Judging by the name of the story, I'm hoping that when they stay the night at the school they'll run into some supernatural awesomeness. The idea that the school has basements and a chamber and some places that are prohibited is quite the set up.


Update soon :)

From: nab

Date: 2015-07-23

Chapter: 2

What will they get themselves into? Hahaha. Joe's 'trust test' was brilliant. I'm gonna try that on my friends. I like their friendship, it reminds me of my childhood friends. Looking forward to the next chapter

From: wz

Date: 2015-07-20

Chapter: 2

Oh I can't wait for the prologue, I have to read this story again then. Rated :)

From: Screamingsilently

Date: 2015-07-15

Chapter: 2

You updated! Why do they want to spend the weekend at school? It reminds me of some movies where teens purposely spend the night at the mall after closing time. I hope they won't get caught.

From: Screamingsilently

Date: 2015-07-10

Chapter: 1

Not boring at all, I enjoyed reading it! Rob sounds such a nice guy. Can't wait for the next chapter

From: nab

Date: 2015-07-03

Chapter: 1

I'm intrigued. Where are they going? And why is music prohibited? This sounds promising. Can't wait to know more.

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