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When I need you ( one shot) by bag_full_of_stars

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From: Penelope_Ink

Date: 2018-06-28

Chapter: 1

First of all, welcome to LPF as a writer!! Can't wait to see more of your work :) It's always great to see new faces on the board.


This was very cute. I love Brad's anxious thoughts and how timid he is. I just wanted to hug him. And Chester being so quick to ask for that ride lol and he was the only one Brad wanted to stay. Way to go, Ches.


But the best part was when Dave admitted it too. And they had their moments. I love love. I'm such a romantic at heart and stuff like this just makes me smile.


Good job overall. I agree with one of the other reviewers...when you're doing thoughts you can enclose your text like this [i]This is me thinking about Chester drinking way too much coffee[/i] and it will show up as italics in your story.

From: A.N.

Date: 2018-06-27

Chapter: 1

That moment in the beginning, when Chester raised his hand to get a ride home from Mike, reminded me of that "I VOLUNTEER!!!" meme, lol.


Also a big fan of Brad/Dave :D Love that moment when Brad was watching Dave play his guitar, and thinking about touching his hands.


These two seem like they are so much in love, and it's really, well, lovely! Nice story, I liked it a lot!

From: ninja

Date: 2018-06-27

Chapter: ?

This was cute, though, maybe I would have written the thought in italics or something, because I got lost sometimes. Apart from that it's nicely written, easy to read and cute

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