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Sirens repeat by JellyfishLP

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From: Emma Shinoda

Date: 2019-10-05

Chapter: 1

This was so sweet and detailed for such a short piece. Like many short stories I read, I'm constantly torn between 'I want more' and 'perfect snapshot'. This really was a perfect snapshot though, Mike's thoughts tell a much longer story just by the emotion and little details added. I loved them painting each other's nails, and the old Nokia phone. I loved that Chester woke up at the end, and Mike forgot his fears and worries instantly, just happy to see Ches is okay <3 Great job, I really enjoyed it :)

From: hearts.on.fire

Date: 2019-09-21

Chapter: 1

I loved this!! You packed a whole lot into a short piece. I love that it was written like Mike talking to Chester, that was something different and it worked really well for this! You painted such a vivid picture, I could just see the both of them- babies with their circa 2000ish hair. Really well done!

From: lpfan503

Date: 2019-09-21

Chapter: 1

You packed a lot into a short story here. The small details are good - I particularly liked the Nokia phone, haha... what an era. I have to say I visualize Mike and Chester the way they looked in the Crawling video based on your description, and that mental picture did not make me sad. God, I loved blonde Chester. And everyone on the site is well aware that I have loved every version of Mike. <3 So yeah, even if this was heavy, I enjoyed the mental picture of the two of them from so long ago. I'm glad it ended with Chester waking up and not something worse... and I'm glad Mike was there. <3

From: mermaid_life87

Date: 2019-09-19

Chapter: 1

Sorry for my late review! I’ve been in a funk, and still feeling sorta shitty, but I wanted to leave you with a few words anyway...


This was really good! Like, really good. As Penelope said, the language barrier was a nice touch. I loved that detail. And the one nurse being a fan. And Chester’s spikey, blonde curls and Mike’s blue hair and the mention of them doing their nails...*happy sigh* Took me straight back to old school Bennoda. I could picture that perfectly. <3


This was very well-written with the perfect amount of detail. Thanks for sharing! :)

From: Penelope_Ink

Date: 2019-09-14

Chapter: 1

This was so good! Much like halvlang, I wish there was more. *sigh* But I'll be good and not whine. I love the panic in Mike's voice, and even though he's drunk and not doing well either, he's right there, going in the ambulance, and at Chester's bedside. My heart aches for him. Ugh, and they had to pump his stomach. That's always awful. I'm glad you let Chester wake up before it was over. At least we know he's okay. You did really well with this, the feel/vibe was spot on. Great oneshot. And Mike should talk to him about that kiss! After Chester's feeling better, that is. And them being in another country where there's a bit of a language barrier I think was a nice touch.

From: halvlang

Date: 2019-09-14

Chapter: 1

So, you write something short and all I want to throw in here is a “I WANT MORE”. Which feels wrong because you did a great job with this standalone.

It’s short and to the point and still transports so many emotions to the reader. The fear Mike is feeling, the love for Chester. All the worries and all the helplessness. Which is heartbreaking but really well written.


So, thanks for sharing!

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