I love the ending wrong lyric song...

I don't like stories with Joe dying and I hope he never takes that way out.

-Vixie-

I do enjoy the fics here, but you can't improve if you have no idea what to improve. People will always be criticized in their lives, and it's a shame that most people can't take it. And that's 'cause they were always praised their entire life even if it was for something of little importance, so when it does matter they can't take it. Sometimes you have to take the shit live gives you, even if it does hurt you, and you have to learn and improve from it.

Rose, i have read a lot of your stories, and this is right up there - i'm not that good at writing angst, so your stories are learning experience

People when i wrote this i was REALLY depressed! I originally wrote this out of expirance and to send a message to people who ignore their friends. Don't be tough cridics to angst writers...we take it the wrong way! Just read the fan fics and enjoy them. Don't go about critizing our work! Some might not ever write again! Thankyou

----------- Rose

Rose, update and do check grammar. Whoever left their name blank then you shouldn't be talking, because hello you're to afraid to put your name! I am a friend of Rose, but I am a super huge critic. I thought it was good, but yes grammar was off. Plus, don't end it with Joe dying. That would both be stupid and off. Anyway, update and give greater details. Why I say this is because I felt like you didn't put your heart (and mind)into this story, and this seems like an awsome story.

Vixie

Geez!!! I hate people like this! Nameless, I understand where you're coming from, and yes, Rose, send me your stuff before you put it up so I can spellcheck and do grammar, but sheesh, man, at least leave your name! That has to be the worst thing anyone could do; make a useful(despite mean and repetitive) comment and not leave their name! Yes, grammar sucks, Rose, but still, nice idea. :)

Whoa, great chapter!

Exscuse me, but aren't you supposed to read reviews and learn from them? If people comment on how your writing lacks detail, shouldn't you try and come out with a good read? And I understand that some fics, in the style that they're written it, don't always need a ton of detail, but when I read your fics I can't say that it was good and I want another chapter. Honestly, I can go on and on about your writing but I'm not going to. As rude as it may seem, I'm trying to help. If you go to the boards and actually read what authors look for in a good fic and what they hate reading, then maybe you'll evolve as a writer. You can only go up and get better as a writer.

And lastly, I'm picking up that you have a few friends here. If they're the people who beta your fics, and I assume that they are, try to find a person with a different view to edit your writing.

But please don't get discouraged by this; I just think that leaving a review like "I loved it, and I want to read more" shouldn't be there when there are people who disagree. Obviously, people have lowered their standards ever since the site moved. Just come out with something good and maybe I'll start leaving positive comments rather then all this shit.

God Rose u just have to write an angst don't be afraid 2 call ok but all in all great fic

*from a hidden place so you cant hurt me*

i liked it so far, but um maybe a bit longer and more detailed-ish? is there more or is that it because the ending seems abrupt-like..

just giving my opinion dont hurt me

*still hiding*

update and soon..!