I really really liked this. It was short but so effective. You made me believe it all. And I felt dirty for reading about him feeling dirty =P

Very well written!

I really hope that you decide to continue with this.

Uh, I looooove this. A great subject to explore. I'm using a similar problem in one of my stories, jigsaw. I enjoyed reading his dark thoughts in regards to this. Rape fantasies are so common but taking it up a nootch, actually acting (in case partly by watching these scenes) brings to a whole new level.

I absolutely adore this. Very well done!

Oh man, Chaz is a lil fucked in the head! yes!

-danni

Interesting story, I can't wait to read what happens next! Update soon.

-VP

Well. First off let me say that this was good for a first time fic-I'm assuming its your first one since there aren't any others listed under your profile, and if I'm wrong then I'm sorry. Is this a chapter fic or a standalone? Either way it works.

But moving on...

I think you could probably use a bit of help with some grammar mistakes and the such: no big deal, they're simple to fix. Another suggestion I would offer is to maybe break up some of your sentences into shorter ones, instead of really long ones. If you click on the 'Board' link you can find a beta who can help you correct those mistakes. Once you fix those I think your work could be great. :)