"Yeah I'm here" Chester said from inside the shower, opening the curtain to expose both naked men standing there.

"What are you guys doing?"

"Comparing hard-ons, what do you think, who wins?" Mike had to swallow very hard, suddenly he wasn't sure if he could talk. This was definitely sexy.

"I think I do." Mike said surprised how it managed to come out as a joke.

"Well prove it." Rob said a little to fast for Mike not to notice.

"Ok, you guys asked for it, I'd hate to put you to shame, but..." He stood up and undressed

"Wow" both boys whispered in unison, just staring.

Rob swallowed, "Nope that’s not far, we were both in the water, get in here."

They both moved over as Mike stepped in.

"Better?"

"Yup." Both at the same time again.

"So three straight guys naked in the shower, we should write a song about this." Mike laughed.

I LOVE THAT PART!!! This is hilarious...and sexy.

That was wonderful, I loved it.*hugs*

Peace out!

-Vampire Princess

Nice job hun I enjoyed that!

I think your a bit hard on that story, I really liked it, but I guess everyone's self critical of their own work. I think you did a good job, cos I usually find reading threesome's harder, but that one was good to read.

is not a bad story, don´t shit yourself and with the spell, don´t worry about it, im terrible with `em

is not a bad story, don´t shit yourself and with the spell, don´t worry about it, im terrible with `em

This was good. I liked how you managed to fix "the problem" with Chester having a boyfriend/having sex before. You did a really great job on this. Wish you'd expand it though....

Chester not thinking about sex? Yeah right!!

Well, that was some slashy story :) I thought it was interesting to stretch out the slash scenes. There were a few minor confusions because you start with saying they were straight and never had sex and switched to the 'had boyfriends before but it didn't go that far'. But those were happily overseen by me since I actually liked Mike in this as the only experienced guy. Though it stands in contrast to my MAW heart and I kept waiting for the downfall. Don't worry I am twisted that way. I especially liked the beginning and thought that him and Chester were really cute, which is why I was surprised to read that Chester is supposed to be straight since they sounded so much like a long-term couple. Very cute indeed. You most definitely have a nice way of writing slash (I envy you for that). It was hot, fun and very fluffy. Which isn't at all bad lol As I said it before in another story of yours I think you just have to concentrate a bit more on the Characters. They are developt very good in this one, don't get me wrong but I have a feeling you sometimes unconciously switch because you feel it's nessassary for the character. I would suggest to not do that. Be sure what they've experienced and what not upfront. It's a story anyway so nobody will take a closer look on the reality of it. Otherwise I'm really enjoying your writings so far and look forward to read more.

that was soooo hott!!!!!! i wonder wat the other guys were doin? u should make sequels cuse man u can go many diff ways wit this story! u rok!

I just read the 3rd and 4th parts. They aren't crap!! I thought they were really good. I hope you continue this story!! Mikey/Chazzy/Robbie love is ALWAYS good **drools** Great job! I really love this story.

Reviewing the reviewing of the reviewing of the review from bitty...

I went back and read all of the chapter and I really don't see anything worth going back and fixing. But that is why I say I am only human. If anyone points anything out to me I always go back and change it so feel free to point out anything you see. As far as it being just silly and hoping that it gets better trust that it won't. I stated many times I was bored and started typing and this story is what happened. I am very suprised that this story got so much feedback becuase as I said I truly hate this story and I make it clear that I knew I made mistakes in it. But I did spend alot of time on it so I posted it.

As far as the spell checking goes I forgot that I haden't done it when I originaly wrote the story but I went to fix it as soon as I saw the review from Bitty. And as I said back to here I do normaly put it through not only my spell check but the grammer program I have.

As far as your remark about it being unfair to other authors. I work very hard on my stories as well, maybe I am not the best author in the world and honestly if I waited till I was 100 percent happy with my stories I would never post them but to say that I am being unfair by posting my stories is, in my opinion, unfair to me.

And about getting a beta there are plenty of people that write in their authors notes that they don't have a beta. I choose not to have one becuae I don't like other people changing the story that I wrote. No one is perfect and I wasn't aware that in order to post on this site you had to have your story meet collage paper standards.

But for those of you that did enjoy this story I am very greatful for your support and I will write a final chapter to fix the Chaz boyfriend blunder I made. Thank You.

Ashly : )

Reviewing the Reviewing the review from Bitty.

There are still lots of mistakes in chapter 1 - I've not made it to reading chapter 2 yet, but have to say that certain part of your story is funny but for the most part it's just silly. I seriously hope it gets better.

I really would appreciate it if you put your stories through a spell checker and beta before you upload onto the site!

Other authors work very hard on their stories and spend a long time perfecting their chapters - it's infair that their stories are bumped down by a story the author knows isn't really ready to post.

Please fix the mistakes - not all of them are spelling mistakes so a spell checker wont pick them up, but a good beta would. visit the boards!

GQ

OMG! U have to update! Please update!!!!

Peace out!

-Vampire Princess

Reviewing the review from Bitty.

Yes I know what you mean. I usually put the stories I write through my spell check and all that jazz but I was too lazy to do that or even bother to go through and read it when I posted. But since you asked I went through and the spelling and grammer is fixed now but I am only human so there still may be some mistakes. Sorry

Ashly : )

very nice..if i were mike i would feel the same way..lol i enjoyed it..more? later

ok..well this is a great story, but seriously u need a beta or sumin cause spelling sucks

sry..hehe just tellin ya

update soon

~Bitty~

I can get used to this too. >.<

aww the endings cute lol

I just read part 1. That was awesome. **Runs off to read more**